Draft of Cursed Heritage
In the heart of the old, foggy town of Willow Creek lived 25-year-old Eliza. She had always felt an unexplainable connection to her family's Victorian mansion, but it wasn't until after her grandmother's mysterious death that she began to uncover secrets hidden deep within its walls. One stormy night, while exploring the attic, Eliza stumbled upon a dusty, leather-bound journal filled with cryptic symbols and warnings of ancient evil. As she read on, chilling whispers echoed through the halls, and a cold draft swept across her skin. Curiosity turned into fear as the entries spoke of forbidden rituals and dark pacts made generations ago by her ancestors to keep their family line powerful. Determined to break the curse, Eliza began deciphering the journal's contents with the help of a local historian who had heard tales of the supernatural from his grandfather. Together, they discovered that only one ritual remained: the sacrifice of a chosen descendant every century to seal the dark entity within the mansion forever. With each passing day, Eliza felt the malevolent force growing stronger, and she knew she had to act quickly before it was too late.
Draft Review of Cursed Heritage
The draft is well-written with a strong atmosphere of suspense and mystery. The plot is engaging, but there are a few areas that could be tightened up for clarity and impact. For instance, the transition between discovering the journal and feeling fear could benefit from more detail to build tension. Additionally, the ending feels rushed, leaving some ambiguity about whether Eliza will succeed in breaking the curse or not. Suggesting these improvements would help enhance the story's overall coherence and emotional resonance.