Draft of Time Traveler's Dilemma
First Draft of Time Traveler's First Journey
John had always dreamed of time travel. Now, as he stood in front of the sleek, silver device, his heart raced with anticipation. The contraption hummed softly, its display lighting up to show a shimmering timeline before him. He took a deep breath and stepped inside.
The world around him vanished as the machine whirred into action. For a moment, everything went dark. When light returned, John found himself in a bustling street filled with people dressed in 1920s attire. The aroma of coffee and the distant sound of jazz bled through the air.
John's first destination was a pivotal event: the signing of the Treaty of Versailles. He approached the crowd, trying to blend in but feeling like an outsider. His hands trembled as he held back his urge to step forward and make a difference. The historian inside him urged caution; altering history could have unpredictable consequences.
After a few hours, John returned to the device. As he activated it again, the world around him faded away once more. This time, he emerged in a dystopian future where technology had advanced beyond recognition but humanity was struggling to survive.
Back at his own time, John felt a mix of awe and trepidation. The machine hummed quietly as if reading his emotions. He knew that every trip would come with its own set of challenges and decisions. For now, he was content to observe rather than intervene.
Draft Review of Time Traveler's Dilemma
The narrative flows well, with clear character development. The descriptions of different eras add depth to the story. However, consider expanding on John's internal conflict regarding whether to intervene or observe in each era. Also, provide more detail about the dystopian future setting to enhance the contrast.