Draft of Elian's Legacy
Elian had always felt like an outsider in the bustling village of Eldoria. His mother, a healer, often spoke of his father, a great warrior who had left them when he was just a toddler. As Elian approached his eighteenth birthday, he knew it was time to prove himself and claim his destiny.
Draft Review of Elian's Legacy
The opening establishes Elian's character and background well. However, more context about Eldoria and his mother would enrich the setting. Additionally, hinting at what he must prove or his destiny could give a clearer direction to the plot.